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Eva Hernandez Morality without a Religious Base Society is base​d on rules and values stated by past societies. __It is society who imposes__ (choice of words ) (society is not a "WHO") (put 'that', instead of 'who') the accepted actions in every individual through moral principles. Moral principles are the right and wrong principles accepted by individuals as values. **[ Explain what are good and bad principles]** They rely on the individual human behavior and are determined by the duty of each individual. The duty is in relationship of how each individual plays an important role in every society. There is a saying in economics, “There is no such thing as a free lunch.” If you are invited by a friend to have a free lunch because he is buying it to you, the meal would be free for you but it will not be for him. However, if there was a sign stating that there was a free lunch-hour in a restaurant to celebrate a national holiday it will be free for you but not for the restaurant. Lastly, if the sponsors of the restaurant got to donate them the products (rephrase, this sentence does not sound right), it will cost them but not to the restaurant; by donating they are not paying taxes which is something less in the income of the government’s economy. So in the end **,** society ends up paying the free lunch you had with your friend. Now, apply this scenario to morality, if a 12-hour worker has a very important impact on the economy of a society it is because it provides his work a bigger production. So, this same worker decides to work honestly and efficiently, he is giving moral principles to his work (eliminate work) community. If his work (eliminate work) community looks at the good behaviors, they will imitate him and therefore have moral principles. As an effect there will be a moral society. (this sentences cannot stand alone) It is society who (put 'that', instead of 'who') stresses the standard behavior of good behavior. Society is governed by rules and standards for the common being. Moral principles are the shape of a good behavior alone, without religious beliefs. Their existence are observed by every good action on humans. Right conduct is a part of moral principles in society. It’s imposed by society on their right or wrong accepted norms. Religion does not have to be part of the existence of moral principles in order to directly affect society in different ways. **[ Great introduction, consider revising some word choice and grammar so it sounds mind blowing]** (I am finding it hard to understand your concepts and ideas, and it seems to me that your thesis statement is not clearly stated in this introductory paragraph.) So far I'm finding most of the other comments by your peers to be accurate. I understand what point you are trying to make, but it could be cleaned up a bit, made to sound more polished.1268963158

Ethics proposed moral principles as the conduct of a normal life. Religion is not part of a good independent character; moral decisions are based on logic. How are moral decisions based on logic? Explain.1268963158 People without a religion can have a very moral life with a lot of good values. People’s principles are based on their actions and analysis; they pertain to decision making, taking in consideration what is best for humanity. Religious ideas are good but they don’t (do not instead of don't, don't join two words when writing a formal essay) concentrate on the behavior of people. Religion based ("bases",instead of past sentence based) their ideas on idealizing the true behavior of men. They do not stop to see their ideas to see if they are able to apply them in every human being. The result is that people separate from religion because it is too difficult to fulfill religious expectations. (rephrase sentence, it is awkward) A logical person, after pausing whether the action is good or bad has moral principles. (rephrase sentence, it is awkward) Religion teaches to love your neighbor and forgiveness, but they also teach self-respect. (where diod you get this information? Make sure to add evidence to give this essay credibility, ethos) As a result, people are thinking every movement they make through careful actions. (rephrase sentence, it is awkward) Being moral person refers to being able to analyze what is good and bad in order to proceed. A human being must not act in order to please others ; religion teaches the good will for others before yours. This is the greatest example in which religion does not necessarily need to be with morality because it asks for an amoral behavior. Before somebody can be moral, they need to respect themselves in order to see how they can have good actions. Therefore, a person that knows after pleasing himself what is good for him would chose the good things in order to act it towards society. (cite sources) state clearly, be precise and concise. I agree -- use internal citations of experts to add credibility to your essay and make it more persuasive.1268963158

Society must understand that principles are never violated if someone does not belong to a religion. All societies and people have principles, regardless of their religion. Morality should be seen as something to improve life. Much (wc) (perhaps, many?) (wc) citizens see morality as a good afterlife, but they need to live with morality for a good life. Their present is the most important thing to consider in every moral life. By deciding to live an honest, patient, and respectful life people learn to understand the meaning of life. If they base their life on their afterlife, they will never learn to live correctly, they will not be happy. Imagine a person sacrificing all the time his willing believing he will have a better life in the afterlife. The result is ridiculous (word choice) because he will not be enjoying most of his life. Religious books were written by humans, the principles came from past societies. The set of rules are part of most societies, their understanding of moral principles are needed for the ending in the binding with religion. (rephrase, awkward sentence) From time to time the populations change and they pass in their genes favorable characteristics. (I don't think one is able to pass his or her genes to another person, be careful with your wording) As a result, there are more favorable characteristics been around from person to person eliminating unfavorable characteristics. rephrase. Therefore, people remain more closely in their relationships with human ties. Stronger human ties make the actions of people to be good.

Humans must understand that morality does not come from religion. Morality comes from different sources, such as past experiences. (source backing this up) The writers of the bible or religious texts were completely human while they wrote the books. They wrote the stories through divine inspiration and past experiences. They saw the principles they were writing in their texts as values because they had seen the effects on their society. So, their ideas can be taken outside from religion. Religion passages offer violent means referring to among actions. If a modern parent stoned to death a child or adolescent for not honoring them, society will think of them as amoral. which society? reference for this idea? Yet, these are the punishments written inside the bible for such acts. Since modern humans do not keep track of their religious texts to the letter, they have other methods for determining which punishment they want to follow and which punishment they are willing to discard; following religion is not always the right thing. The religious command is not always secure; being obedient just because of a good behavior is dictated by God. (good bible example and comparison to your statement)

First, having a moral code comes from a superior being from a religious own purpose, in order for somebody to be moral, they need to follow religion. However, a moral code is constructed by the behavior and beliefs of somebody when they rationalize their norms and rules. **[ consider giving some examples of these norms]** state your resources. Their behavior is not controlled by a superior being because morality comes from the questioning if something is good or bad. Then, religion asks for good conducts from individuals in order to live in an equalized and safe world. (It is true:remove this), religion and the religious texts // ask ?// for good behavior and for violent acts. Religion beliefs they have the right to ask for violent acts in order to have moral principles in people’s life. Most of the time, religion tends to //ask// for really sacrifices and violent acts to test faith. People without this (remove) faith are more moral than religious people because they are never tested in such a cruel and interesting way. Lastly, ethics is not only an opinion rather a way of life, given to people through a religious basis. It is true, ethics dictates the correct action; it refers to the better position of a human in his or her actions.

Most people will consider believing religion should not be included in morality as blasphemous. Since the beginning of whether a(remove this) creation or evolution humans have (has) conducted behaviors in which to believe and analyze. **[ It wouldn´t hurt you to explain some of these conducted behaviors]** In society there exists a gap between morality and religion. People own willing (awk)(people's own willingness) is to do whatever they want and to perform as they want to in different situations. However, analyzing an abortion can lead to many arguments. The gap between religion and morality is pretty obvious in this case. By having an abortion in case that the baby is very sick and that it will only live three days after being born, leads to a mother to take the wrong decision. Religion will state that it is a sin to end somebody else's life, but does it actually counts as a sin when you can prevent that little person from suffering? Morality is about taking the right decisions at the right time in order to have productive results. The abortion in this scenario will have morality because it will prevent the baby from dying a painful death after being born. However, it went against the religious divine command to end the baby’s life. Most of the times humans need to understand their actions by moral principles, after being formed by the logic of people. Religion may call to violent and amoral means. Moral principles are the good traits of people after asking themselves for the right behavior. Every individual has good and bad actions, their logic intercede on their decision. **[ Good although you might consider revising some excess of conjunctions and words that might affect a little the fluidity]**

GOOD. It is clear, concise and precise. I am able to understand your position on this. However, you need to cite sources whenever you provide some information, and there are a few typos you need to fix... great idea of an essay, it is very controversial though, anything that has to do with religion. Try to make your essay more reliable by backing up with the source you got it from. 1268699112SHEILA SIERRA I love your introduction. Great idea on including a scenario, this makes your introduction very interesting. The only thing that you need in order to improve your essay is to include citations and resources that support your ideas. 1268759593

Good. It is an intriguing essay to read and concisely written. There are some grammatical errors to be fixed. You also need some quotes and sources to support your argument. 1268780549

It is a good essay with a very good introduction that attracks the reader it was a very good idea to include a scenario to attract the reader. I think that the ideas in the essay are very good and more facts and evidence would make your essay even better and more reliable. I really like that the essay is written "to the point" and it is very presice giving the reader no confusion. Sofia Chahin

**Comments By: Victor Garcia 1268784807

Overall the essay has good foundlings. I think the essay is interesting and when polished and edited the reader is not going to have any problem liking it. The minor issues with the essay are in relation with the lack of explanation in very few of the statements. We have to remember that in order to guarantee credibility we have to avoid the " things" explanation when we can explain what those things are. Assuring these the reader will have no doubt on the ethos of the essay.The topic of morality without a religious base is really interesting and with the correction of some grammatical mistakes this can make an outstanding and convincing essay. Way to go Eva!, you can make it shine in the Final Draft. Just fix some of the obvious mistakes that appear on Rough Drafts and I think you will be set.**

This essay has a lot of good ideas that are implemented throughout the essay, yet there are some grammatical errors that make it somewhat confusing for the reader to understand what it is you are trying to convey. There is a lack of evidence and research which makes it appear that most of your ideas are not research based. //Religion teaches to love your neighbor and forgiveness, but they also teach self-respect.// //(where diod you get this information? Make sure to add evidence to give this essay credibility, ethos)// Try to include some analysis and research to give your essay more credibility. I think your introduction paragraph is too long and I find it hard to find your thesis statement. It is very interesting and learned some new things yet it lacks credibility. //From time to time the populations change and they pass in their genes favorable characteristics. (I don't think one is able to pass his or her genes to another person, be careful with your wording) // Try to fix these grammatical errors and make your essay precise and concise. I liked the many examples and scenarios you gave; it helped give the essay some more understanding of your topic. //There is a saying in economics, “There is no such thing as a free lunch.” If you are invited by a friend to have a free lunch because he is buying it to you, the meal would be free for you but it will not be for him. // 1268795639

Bibliography

1. Hanks, J. (2010) “Morality without religion” Retrieved March 12,2010 from [|http://www.wjh.harvard.edu/~mnkylab/publications/recent/HauserSingerMoralRelig05.pdf]

2. Flickety, B. (2009) “How to determine Moral Principles” Retrieved March 8,2010 from []

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4. Schumann,P. (2003) “Moral Principles” Retrieved March 9,2010 from krypton.mnsu.edu/~schumann/www/teach/chapter_2.ppt 5. Sowa, C. (2000) “Thesaurus of Morals” Retrieved March 10,2010 from [|http://www.humanismbyjoe.com/morality_without_religion.htm]

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Society is base​d on rules and values stated by past societies. It is society that imposes the accepted actions in every individual through moral principles. Moral principles are the right and wrong principles accepted by individuals as values. An accepted rule of action or an accepted behavior is considered to be a good principle. The opposite behavior of a right principle will be a wrong principle. They rely on the individual human behavior and are determined by the duty of each individual. The duty is in relationship of how each individual plays an important role in every society. There is a saying in economics, “There is no such thing as a free lunch.” If you are invited by a friend to have a free lunch because he is buying it to you, the meal would be free for you but it will not be for him. However, if there was a sign stating that there was a free lunch-hour in a restaurant to celebrate a national holiday it will be free for you but not for the restaurant. Lastly, if the suppliers of the restaurant donate the materials for the meal, it will cost them but not the restaurant; by donating they are not paying taxes which will create a lower income for the government’s economy. So in the en d**,** society ends up paying the free lunch you had with your friend. Now, apply this scenario to morality, if a 12-hour worker has a very important impact on the economy of a society it is because it provides his work a bigger production. So, this same worker decides to work honestly and efficiently, he is giving moral principles to his community. If his community looks at the good behaviors, they will imitate him and therefore have moral principles. As an effect there will be a moral society. It is society that stresses the standard behavior of good behavior. Society is governed by rules and standards for the common being. Moral principles are the shape of a good behavior alone, without religious beliefs. Their existence is observed by every good action on humans. Right conduct is a part of moral principles in society. It’s imposed by society on their right or wrong accepted norms. Religion does not have to be part of the existence of moral principles in order to directly affect society in different ways.

Ethics proposed moral principles as the conduct of a normal life. Religion is not part of a good independent character; moral decisions are based on logic. People without a religion can have a very moral life with a lot of good values. People’s principles are based on their actions and analysis; they pertain to decision making, taking in consideration what is best for humanity. Religious ideas are good but they do not concentrate on the behavior of people. Religion bases their ideas on idealizing the true behavior of men. They do not stop to see their ideas to see if they are able to apply them in every human being. People will start separating from their religion because they will find too difficult to fulfill the religious expectations. A good or bad moral principle is the result of a logical person that pauses and considers his or her action. “ Love and religion are acts of endless forgiveness, a tender look which becomes a habit.” (Ustinov,P. ND) Religion teaches to love your neighbor and forgiveness, but they also teach self-respect. People should always look to make the good choice. Being moral person refers to being able to analyze what is good and bad in order to proceed. “ Religion is not something separate and apart from ordinary life. It is life -- life of every kind viewed from the standpoint of meaning and purpose: life lived in the fuller awareness of its human quality and spiritual significance. ” (Davis,A. ND) A human being must not act in order to please others; religion teaches the good will for others before yours. This is the greatest example in which religion does not necessarily need to be with morality because it asks for an amoral behavior. Before somebody can be moral, they need to respect themselves in order to see how they can have good actions. Therefore, a person that knows after pleasing him what is good for him would chose the good things in order to act it towards society.

Society must understand that principles are never violated if someone does not belong to a religion. All societies and people have principles, regardless of their religion. Morality should be seen as something to improve life. Many citizens see morality as a good afterlife, but they need to live with morality for a good life. Their present is the most important thing to consider in every moral life. By deciding to live an honest, patient, and respectful life people learn to understand the meaning of life. If they base their life on their afterlife, they will never learn to live correctly, they will not be happy. Imagine a person sacrificing all the time his willing believing he will have a better life in the afterlife. The result is derisive because he will not be enjoying most of his life. Religious books were written by humans, the principles came from past societies. Rules are part of every society, their understanding is very important because moral principles are needed in the binding with religion. From time to time the populations change and they passed in their genes favorable characteristics. As a result, there are more favorable characteristics for each person, eliminating unfavorable characteristics. Therefore, people remain more closely in their relationships with human ties. Stronger human ties make the actions of people to be good.

Humans must understand that morality does not come from religion. Morality comes from different sources, such as past experiences. The writers of the bible or religious texts were completely human while they wrote the books. They wrote the stories through divine inspiration and past experiences. They saw the principles they were writing in their texts as values because they had seen the effects on their society. So, their ideas can be taken outside from religion. “I cannot conceive of a God who rewards and punishes his [sic] creatures, or has a will of the type of which we are conscious ourselves. ” (Einstein, A. ND) Religion passages offer violent means referring to among actions. If a modern parent stoned to death a child or adolescent for not honoring them, society will think of them as amoral. Yet, these are the punishments written inside the bible for such acts. Since modern humans do not keep track of their religious texts to the letter, they have other methods for determining which punishment they want to follow and which punishment they are willing to discard; following  religion is not always the right thing. The religious command is not always secure; being obedient just because of a good behavior is dictated by God. First, having a moral code comes from a superior being from a religious own purpose, in order for somebody to be moral, they need to follow religion. However, a moral code is constructed by the behavior and beliefs of somebody when they rationalize their norms and rules. **“** When I do good, I feel good; when I do bad, I feel bad. That's my religion. ” (Lincoln, A. ND) Their behavior is not controlled by a superior being because morality comes from the questioning if something is good or bad. Then, religion asks for good conducts from individuals in order to live in an equalized and safe world. Religion and the religious texts //ask// for good behavior and for violent acts. Religion beliefs they have the right to ask for violent acts in order to have moral principles in people’s life. Most of the time, religion tends to //ask// for really sacrifices and violent acts to test faith. People without faith are more moral than religious people because they are never tested in such a cruel and interesting way. Lastly, ethics is not only an opinion rather a way of life, given to people through a religious basis. It is true, ethics dictates the correct action; it refers to the better position of a human in his or her actions.

Most people will consider believing religion should not be included in morality as blasphemous. Since the beginning of creation or evolution humans has conducted behaviors in which to believe and analyze. Such behaviors will be to respect others and do goods to others. However, i n society exists a gap between morality and religion. People’s own willingness is to do whatever they want and to perform as they want to in different situations. However, analyzing an abortion can lead to many arguments. The gap between religion and morality is pretty obvious in this case. By having an abortion in case that the baby is very sick and that it will only live three days after being born, leads to a mother to take the wrong decision. Religion will state that it is a sin to end somebody else's life, but does it actually counts as a sin when you can prevent that little person from suffering? Morality is about taking the right decisions at the right time in order to have productive results. The abortion in this scenario will have morality because it will prevent the baby from dying a painful death after being born. However, it went against the religious divine command to end the baby’s life. Most of the times humans need to understand their actions by moral principles, after being formed by the logic of people. Religion may call to violent and amoral means. Moral principles are the good traits of people after asking themselves for the right behavior. Every individual has good and bad actions, their logic intercede on their decision.

You've cleaned up a lot of items your peers mentioned and this version is much better than the first one. Still, look up more experts and introduce them. Check out Richard Dawkins and Daniel Dennett to name just two. You'll also need to find experts who disagree with you and present their arguments. That should be the focus of your final draft. 1268964459