Is+it+ever+permissible+to+illegally+download+music,+movies+or+computer+programmes?

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= Illegally download content, is it ever permissible? =

“It is not called illegal download, it is called file-sharing.” That is one of the most common phrases that you __here__ (spelling underlined word) from people who are used to __download__ (grammar) programs, music and videos from the Internet. They say “illegal download” sounds too harsh and __it is not totally true.__ (word choice, or rephrase this part, sound awkward) This topic’s controversy has been increasing as we approach more and more to (into, omit to) a technological era. In the past , when the Internet was not a word in people’s vocabulary, morals about downloading content illegally __was__ (grammar, word tense) not boarded so we are talking about a decent short time frame. So if people are debating it __,__ what is it that makes illegal downloads illegal? The actual definition of illegal download is “using someone else’s intellectual property without permission” (Paquette, 2002). When you are download (are downloading) illegal content you never ask for permission to the copyright owners. So it is ever permissible to illegally download music, videos and programs? No, it is never permissible to download content from the Internet illegally(erase this word, you are trying to prove: is it really illegal?) because you are never asking for the permission to download someone’s intellectual property or creative __E__ndeavour. (not captalized)

When we talk about illegal downloads the thing that critiques it the most is morals. (are morals) Morals my not (might not ) be the same for every people, but when it comes to violation of someone else’s intellectual property people are pretty much against it. (which people? who is against it? specify.) In many countries, (which countries? specify) copyright, patent, or trademark laws recognize the creators of music, videos and computer programs ownership. Yes, laws. There has been a consensus on the protection of creation because stealing creative endeavors is morally wrong. A Kantian ethicist for example, would argue that if it is morally incorrect for one person to download content from the Internet illegally, then it is __nit__ (spelling) morally acceptable for anyone to download content from the Internet illegally .(quote or source) (need sources, how are you going to show credibility, evidence?) (source?) Another case when morality strikes in this topic, is lying and violation of privacy statement. Have you ever come across those long statements that appear when you by (buy) a program or any content? Maybe you have, but have (eliminate 'have') never really taken the time to read it and examine what it really says (awk). The truth about these privacy statements is that in about a million or so words it says that you explicitly do not have the right to copy or reproduce such information (quote) and at the end it gives you a little nasty warning that you can be fined with thousands of (eliminate 'of') dollars and serve time in prison (run on) (run on). So when you download illegally their content, you are lying and also committing a crime. We say crime because when you can be sentenced to prison, you ought to have done something wrong. (everyone knows a crime is something wrong, dont include things that are already known to people, choose a different sentence) (agree with red color :) ) What about this situation: you bought a CD of Band XYZ. You own the CD legally. Later that CD is damaged and does not play or perhaps it is lost or stolen. In your first purchase, did you buy the rights to the music or just to the physical CD? If the former, then could you not ethically download the same CD? How would that be any different that ripping the CD -- which is legal? 1268956619

(Who are the others?-evidence; or just eliminate 'the') The ones who enjoy violating laws and stealing the creative endeavors of other people. (combine this and the previous sentence) These people might be having (put have instead of be having) these ideas from western philosophies such as Confucianism (Confucianism is not western phlosophies.) (true, it's eastern). What Confucians say about this topic is that the creator of the music, movies and programs “do not necessarily have the right to own the fruits of their labor. (omit the period after labor) ”(Paquette, 2002). Other way that Confucians would try to taken another approach to the topic is by taking a communal approach. By communal approach we are referring to the belief that everything should be free meaning offered and shared for the benefit of everyone in the community. (Good examples, but it seems you are just throwing examples about what philosophies say, but not examples of a specific group of person in current times who is against it, QUOTE AND LOOK FOR MORE SOURCES!)

Opposition statements that say downloading illegal content from the Internet is not a crime are fallacious. Take the argument that says that people do not have the right to own what they create. This seems a little absurd because there is no thing that backs that up. It is a simple belief in a philosophy (specify). In the other Confucian belief of communal approach it is something that depends on the creator of the content. Clearly some things were not mean to be communal for the creator. There are some software and samples that the creator has created for the download of everybody with the possibility of reproduction and communal use. These types of download are permitted because they are meant to be explicitly distributed freely by the copyright owners. These philosophies that say it is correct to steal, simply look the benefit of the people, not the damage and ethics of stealing to someone else .(awk) (Good analysis)

In conclusion, downloading illegal music, videos and programs that are prohibited by the copyright owners is never permissible. Even though people say it is permissible because it is a collaboration of many people, they are wrong because it is never permissible (wc) ( choose a synonym of the word) (c hange word so you don't repeat it in the same sentence) to steal. Privacy statements are created by authors and creators to inform about what is not permissible to do with their software. As some Kantian ethicists argue (quotes or sources), if someone does not have the right to download illegal content, then nobody has the right. (need to really expand on this) Your argument seems to rely on the assumption that downloading copyrighted material is wrong because it is stealing and stealing is always wrong; but let's look at the underlying assumption: is stealing always wrong? Is it wrong for a man to steal a loaf of bread from a rich man to feed his starving family? Would it be wrong for someone to steal medicine to save her child? Some philosophers argue that stealing might be permissible in circumstances such as these. Now what if you downloaded a patented formula that allowed you to make the medicine to save your child? Would that still be wrong as well? I would suggest looking at your underlying assumption of stealing always being wrong and seeing if that assertion holds. You might find that under some circumstances, it does not. You'll also need to include more sources; cite some experts -- check out wired.com or maximumpc.com -- I've read some articles there that address the issue. But, overall a good start on a timely issue. 1268956619 =Bibliography=

"File sharing - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia." //Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia//. N.p., n.d. Web. 13 Mar. 2010. . morals. (n.d.). The American Heritage® Dictionary of the English Language, Fourth Edition. Retrieved March 13, 2010, from Dictionary.com website: [] Paquette, Paul. (2002). //Philosophy//. McGraw-Hill Ryerson.

There are some spelling mistakes on the essay, but overall, it is a pretty intriguing essay. Use of some real life cases, such as court cases or illegal p2p programs getting sued. 1268759638 The topic for this essay is really intrguing. It is concisely written and easy to understand. However, more sources and sentences might have improved to support what you want to argue. Be careful with grammatical errors, especially some spelling mistakes too. There are some run on and awkward sentences to be modified. You have chosen really nice topic to argue with. Find more sources to strenghten your argument. 1268781821

This is a nice topic because it deals with things that have arised because of the internet boom, the boom in technology of recent years. However, I dont feel you deliver the purpose correctly. There are very few arguments in this essay. Because of this, it sounds more like an opinion, one that you would express to a friend or in a conversation, rather than a persuasive essay. Remember, you are trying to persuade the reader that your point of view is the correct one. You NEED TO LOOK FOR MORE SOURCES. Your approach and delivery seem feeble and you need to provide credibility sources, what important people in the business have said and such. There are a lot of important individuals that are in the business and have said important things about this. Also, you should read your essay out loud and correct grammar and spelling mistakes, some sentences sound awkward because of the grammar. I believe your strongest paragraph is your introduction paragraph. You have a good thesis statement that clearly expresses your point of view. Still, it needs improving. Because you lack quality in your body-argument essays, you can't really express them in your introductory paragraph. Once you fix your arguments and include more sources, more credibility, more evidence, more reasons for thinking the way you do(why you are convinced that downloading stuff from internet is never permissible), your introductory paragraph will better its quality. Your weakest paragraph is your conclusion. This is for the same reason that you lack arguments to make reference to. Improve this and you'll improve your essay overall significantly. Keep up the good work and nice topic! 1268788451

I really like the topic of your essay since it is about something all of us can relate to. I think that the red color (ruth) already said everything needed to be said but some of the weaknesses of it though are the need of more strong arguments and a better thesis statement. Also, there are some minor grammatical and spelling mistakes, but nothing big. To improve it I would recommend working on stronger arguments and including more proofs to support them. One of the things I like was how you started your essay, very creative. Well done :) -Janelle Andonie

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=Illegally download content, is it ever permissible?=

“It is not called illegal download, it is called file-sharing.” That is one of the most common phrases that you here from people who are used to download programs, music **, ** and videos from the Internet. They say “illegal download” sounds too harsh and it is not totally true. This topic’s controversy has been increasing as we approach more and more to a technological era. In the past, when the Internet was not a word in people’s vocabulary, morals about downloading content illegally was not boarded so we are talking about a decent short time frame. So if people are debating it __,__ what is it that makes illegal downloads illegal? The actual definition of illegal download is “using someone else’s intellectual property without permission” (Paquette, 2002). When you are download (are downloading) illegal content you never ask for permission to the copyright owners. So it is ever permissible to illegally download music, videos and programs? No, it is never permissible to download content from the Internet illegally(erase this word, you are trying to prove: is it really illegal?) because you are never asking for the permission to download someone’s intellectual property or creative ** e **ndeavour.

When we talk about illegal downloads the thing (word choice) that critiques it the most is morals. Morals may not (might not ) be the same for every people, but when it comes to violation of someone else’s intellectual property**, **people are pretty much against it. In many countries, copyright, patent, or trademark laws recognize the creators of music, videos**, **and computer programs ownership. Yes, laws. There has been a consensus on the protection of creation because stealing creative endeavors (remember that not only are creative endeavors stolen but many other things as well) is morally wrong. A Kantian ethicist (definition for Kantian ethicists, remember it must be understandale for any person who reads this essay, not only us philosophy students) for example, would argue that if it is morally incorrect for one person to download content from the Internet illegally, then it is not morally acceptable for anyone to download content from the Internet illegally. (citation needed) (quote or source)

Another case when morality strikes in this topic, is lying and violation of privacy statement. (rephrase sentence) Have you ever come across those long statements that appear when you by (buy) a program or any content? Maybe you have, but have never really taken the time to read it and examine what it really says (awk). (I'm not sure I'm getting what you are trying to say) The truth about these privacy statements is that in about a million or so words it says that you explicitly do not have the right to copy or reproduce such information and at the end it gives you a little nasty warning that you can be fined with thousands of dollars and serve time in prison (run on). So when you download illegally their content, you are lying and also committing a crime. We say crime because when you can be sentenced to prison, you ought to have done something wrong.

“ It is file-sharing and there is nothing wrong with it ”. That is what the others say, the ones who enjoy violating laws and stealing the creative endeavors of other people. These people might be having (put have instead of be having) these ideas from western philosophies such as Confucianism (Confucianism is not western phlosophies.). What Confucians say about this topic is that the creator of the music, movies and programs “do not necessarily have the right to own the fruits of their labor.”(Paquette, 2002). Other way that Confucians would try to take another approach to the topic is by taking a communal approach. By communal approach we are referring to the belief that everything should be free meaning offered and shared for the benefit of everyone in the community.

Opposition statements that say downloading illegal content from the Internet is not a crime is fallacious. Take the argument that says that people do not have the right to own what they create. This seems a little absurd because there is no thing that backs that up; it is a simple belief in philosophy (specify). In the other Confucian belief of communal approach**, ** it is something that depends on the creator of the content. Clearly some things were not meant to be communal from the creator. There are some software and samples that the creator has created (awk) for the download of everybody with the possibility of reproduction and communal use. These types of download are permitted because they are meant to be explicitly distributed freely by the copyright owners. These philosophies that say it is correct to steal, simply look the benefit of the people, overlooking the damage and ethics of stealing to someone else .(awk)

In conclusion, (don't say in conclusion, it should be clearly stated for the reader to know it is the conclusion) downloading illegal music, videos and programs that are prohibited by the copyright owners is never permissible. Even though people say it is permissible because it is a collaboration omit: of many people, they are wrong because it is never permissible (wc) to steal. Privacy statements are created by authors and creators to inform about what is not permissible to do with their software. As some Kantian ethicists argue (quotes or sources), if someone does not have the right to download illegal content, then nobody has the right. =Bibliography=

"File sharing - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia." //Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia//. N.p., n.d. Web. 13 Mar. 2010. . morals. (n.d.). The American Heritage® Dictionary of the English Language, Fourth Edition. Retrieved March 13, 2010, from Dictionary.com website: [] Paquette, Paul. (2002). //Philosophy//. McGraw-Hill Ryerson.

There are some spelling mistakes on the essay, but overall, it is a pretty intriguing essay. Use of some real life cases, such as court cases or illegal p2p programs getting sued. 1268759638 The topic for this essay is really intrguing. It is concisely written and easy to understand. However, more sources and sentences might have improved to support what you want to argue. Be careful with grammatical errors, especially some spelling mistakes too. There are some run on and awkward sentences to be modified. You have chosen really nice topic to argue with. Find more sources to strenghten your argument. 1268781821

there are grammatical errors that need to be corrected to make this essay better in quality. I like your idea as well as the opening statement, it is catchy. I feel that your thesis statement should be more clear and towards your conclusion, do not state "In conlcusion" like you did, "In conclusion, downloading illegal music, videos and programs that are prohibited by the copyright owners is never permissible. " it should be easy for the reader to learn that it is the conclusion because you are restating what you have said, summarizing your entire ideas. 1268788941

I believe the thesis statement is somewhat weak, are there any other reasons why it is illegally. I also believe your thesis statement should be changed to something like: It is immoral (or morally wrong) to download movies, programs, or songs illegally because…Your essay seems to be very fragmented, and your topics sentences need to be more concise, take this one for example: When we talk about illegal downloads the things that critiques it the most is morals. Instead you should say: Some people believe it is immoral to download illegally because… Your essay needs a lot of work. Try finding more specific examples.user:gabriv